EBI-
- written English and basic errors you need to proof read. Laura croft? Women are begging?
-The Internet isn't an intro first paragraph needs a lot of work
-not focus on the question
-topic sentences for each paragraph need to clearly link to the question
-only 15 footnotes need another 10/20 Need more from books and journals
-you could make much more of you 21st-century feminism blogs twitter
-bibliography needs more you must have films in there
-you need to learn how to introduce quotes
Aiming grade - B - 33 marks
5 things:
-more quotes search up online
-check work before handing it in
- introduce quotes properly
-get more footnotes from journals and books to get a better grade
-spell check before you hand it in so that no spelling errors can bring you down
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